Some Continued Implausibilities in The Straw Men
Sun Feb 15, 2009
No chance that a Post-Church Commission CIA hires the protagonist.
Little chance that the SAC who gives Nina a ride drives a Lexus.
All internet sleuthing—very shaky.
The mix-tape that Bobby comes up with.
Confusion about the effects of heavy metal exposure.
The various overt references to Thomas Harris and The X-Files only highlight the deficiencies in this story-world’s internal coherence, while apparently intending to do the opposite.
Bobby as a character—his motivation in diegetic terms versus his obvious narrative function (information dumping).
It would be fascinating, I think, to track the editorial changes in this MS and others in the genre. I doubt that the Thomas Harris books were heavily edited, for example, at least not in major plot terms; but I suspect that this one may have been.